Post by Graveyard Goddess on Oct 28, 2005 18:47:33 GMT -5
Id love some feedback and critiquing some ways to improve it as well! thanks guys 
Perfect Confusion
The rhythmic beating of my heart;
My crawling insides;My runaway breath and
The fluttering of wings, beneath my skin;
Make me go all weak--Wandering aimlessly
Fragile;
For the altruistic sort of instrumental eyes;
That heal my open wounds with heated glue;
Simply anticipate a tragedy.
From the statistic sort of heartrending cries;
They call me the artist of
My shadow;
So I must cut and paste the colours of my soul.
On to the canvas I create; to compose
A perfect Confusion...A beautiful array
of constant pain;
Like my headstone;
Like my story; I freeze the time; inside my memory
With hidden camera I capture each flaw
Like fireflies in a jar; suffocating.
Glowing;
Still I must complete, my masterpiece.
So I cut my faded paper stare
My legacy; and silent time
I toss away
the shreds to the burning light
when no one’s looking I will follow
I will dance just like the flames
And burn ...I will disappear
into the air.
Perfect Confusion
The rhythmic beating of my heart;
My crawling insides;My runaway breath and
The fluttering of wings, beneath my skin;
Make me go all weak--Wandering aimlessly
Fragile;
For the altruistic sort of instrumental eyes;
That heal my open wounds with heated glue;
Simply anticipate a tragedy.
From the statistic sort of heartrending cries;
They call me the artist of
My shadow;
So I must cut and paste the colours of my soul.
On to the canvas I create; to compose
A perfect Confusion...A beautiful array
of constant pain;
Like my headstone;
Like my story; I freeze the time; inside my memory
With hidden camera I capture each flaw
Like fireflies in a jar; suffocating.
Glowing;
Still I must complete, my masterpiece.
So I cut my faded paper stare
My legacy; and silent time
I toss away
the shreds to the burning light
when no one’s looking I will follow
I will dance just like the flames
And burn ...I will disappear
into the air.
