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Post by Graveyard Goddess on Jul 4, 2005 8:40:12 GMT -5
Sadist Love My insides release again, from every breath you take Upon myself I paint two more; for every cut you make And every thought you shed-Deeper down I do succumb For every tear and every blade you draw it is I who's become numb This empathy You watch yourself bleed; From this empathy; When you drain the blood from me You watch yourself burn, when you've lit me in a dancing murder's fire Though you caressed me; I've been cremated by your ire You forgot to send the truth; When you wrapped me in your loving lies Tell me it would be okay; When I saw the anger in your eyes And I watched you jump though I stood miles upon miles away, but I held my blade since you said it would all dissipate And deepest down I do succumb; for every tear the end is near And you say you loved what I've become; though you know I'm leaving since you've disappeared
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foblin
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Living In Sin
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Post by foblin on Jul 4, 2005 10:50:46 GMT -5
I love that!! It's fantabulous!! I wish I could write like you ;D #3126452#
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Post by starryeyes on Jul 4, 2005 12:00:02 GMT -5
:Dvery very good... I've run out of good comments tosay about your poetry stephie!
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Post by Graveyard Goddess on Jul 5, 2005 5:38:58 GMT -5
awww *hugs* How about some critisism then? it would be sooo appreciated!
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Post by starryeyes on Jul 5, 2005 8:41:26 GMT -5
well the only thing that i can find that might be a bad thing is all your poems are all kinda about the same thing, you know?
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Post by Graveyard Goddess on Jul 5, 2005 19:30:01 GMT -5
well I dont plan on writing a book of them the reason I write is to rid myself of bad feelings in a good way ;D
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Post by starryeyes on Jul 5, 2005 19:38:38 GMT -5
okay then. then that really is all i have to say about your poems
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