foblin
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Post by foblin on Jun 17, 2005 15:19:05 GMT -5
I am the voice inside your head,
The one that talks when you're long dead.
I am the voice inside your mind,
The one you can't leave yet cannot find.
I am the voice that's in control,
The one whos prophecies are always told.
I am the voice that rules your thoughts,
The special king, for which you fought.
I am the voice inside your head,
The on that talks when you're long dead.
I wrote this about 7 months ago. *give me constructive crtisism*
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Post by Graveyard Goddess on Jun 17, 2005 15:46:24 GMT -5
*hugs* I love your poetry evie....*whispers* specially the poem you sent me i have it framed all purty
Here is your syllable scheme. it works out nicley its got good rhythm
8I am the voice inside your head,
8The one that talks when you're long dead.
8I am the voice inside your mind,
9The one you can't leave yet cannot find.
8I am the voice that's in control,
10The one whos prophecies are always told.
8I am the voice that rules your thoughts,
8The special king, for which you fought.
8I am the voice inside your head,
I dont understand the second line up from the bottom personally but that is alright cos it dont matter your poem is lovely! *chants "im the voice which rules your thoughts!!!!im the voice which rules your thoughts!!!!* teehee #3126452#
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foblin
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Post by foblin on Jun 17, 2005 15:50:34 GMT -5
Thanks Stephie  you framed my poem?*blushes* I can explain that line if you want me too. |
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Post by Graveyard Goddess on Jun 17, 2005 15:57:25 GMT -5
only if you want to dear you dont gotta its YOUR poem xx |
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foblin
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Post by foblin on Jun 17, 2005 16:01:47 GMT -5
It's to do with how the one in charge or with authority can make you do things e.i. making people fight.
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Post by starryeyes on Jun 17, 2005 17:22:53 GMT -5
I am the voice inside your head, The one that talks when you're long dead. I am the voice inside your mind, The one you can't leave yet cannot find. I am the voice that's in control, The one whos prophecies are always told. I am the voice that rules your thoughts, The special king, for which you fought. I am the voice inside your head, The on that talks when you're long dead. I wrote this about 7 months ago. *give me constructive crtisism*really good. i like the last two lines.... very creative! and it is catchy.... i can't get the third and fourth lines out of my head. |
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foblin
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Post by foblin on Jun 18, 2005 7:28:31 GMT -5
Thanks I can't believe you have my poem in your head and not Green Day Chloe  Stephie ~ I still have the poem you sent me It's in my folder I keep for special things that I want to keep extra safe. ;D |
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Post by Graveyard Goddess on Jun 18, 2005 8:52:29 GMT -5
REALLY?! O.O ;D
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foblin
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Post by foblin on Jun 25, 2005 19:36:39 GMT -5
Really Really #3126452#
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you framed my poem?*blushes*
