Leash
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Post by Leash on Oct 7, 2007 11:05:51 GMT -5
This piece was created from a 3 word challenge. The words given to me: "Center", "Leave" and "Worthless". Any ideas for a better title?
You leave me bitter and broken, like a forgotten bit of candy sticky, unwanted.
Worthless..
I am nothing because I see it so.
Black lips no longer kiss.. Love now forgotten. Rotting in this tortured mind, the center of my soul shattered.
I am hopeless.
I rule in a crumbling society.. Queen of the pity-whores.
Feed me.
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Post by Graveyard Goddess on Oct 7, 2007 12:14:32 GMT -5
wow leash this poems great!!
i dont know much about titling work...but i think a cool title would be "starved" or sometihng of the sort...becuase i got a lonely, empty, sort of feel and at the end it says feed me.
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Leash
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Post by Leash on Oct 7, 2007 21:09:17 GMT -5
Ooh maybe "Starved For Attention" would work? No thats too blunt I think, but you definitely got my brain going..
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Post by Graveyard Goddess on Oct 8, 2007 8:04:18 GMT -5
hmm...maybe even "hunger" or "numb"
i dont know. i love this poem though. your a great writer leash
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Post by vampyre on Oct 8, 2007 16:39:39 GMT -5
Starved For Attention works for me ! Nice work
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